The coming storm
The coming storm
A Poem by Coyote Poetry
Just words.
She whispered to me with a softness of an innocent angel voice, making me wish to live and
die in her words. Dear Poet, write me a poem. Make the poem sweet and where love flourish and arose
to destroy sadness and disappointment.
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Dear Katie
Beautiful Katie, you released your veil,
showing me ivory skin of Winter.
I saw heaven in clear blue eyes and
the perfection of your womanly body.
I wish to caress your auburn hair with my wanting hands.
You made me bold and fearless once again.
I know you would be a coming storm.
Love would rise and fall in your warm embrace and sweet kiss.
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She gave me a devilish smile and asked me. I like the elements of the poem.
You wrote of the ending before the first act of love.
Does my love reveal decay before the first true kiss?
Old Poet smiled and he told her. I hold relics of love abandoned.
Love attained take time my sweet Katie. Let’s make no promises till
we allow the midnight moon and sun to meet.
She falls softly into accepting arms. Her silence means yes when new boundaries
of love are being built.
Coyote/John Castellenas
I like the analogy that a relationship can be akin to a force of nature.
It might be a typo, but my only problem is with the last line. Can I suggest adding an ‘s’ to either ‘silence’ or ‘mean’?
Otherwise I like the too and fro in the changing narrative voice. Another nice one John!
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Thank you for the help. I will repair now.
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No problems. it is easier to see the errors in others’ writings mainly, I think, because we are too close to our own… It takes some maturity to get over the ego and accept criticism – just as there is an art in giving constructive feedback. It takes practice, so I hope I am doing that at least! 🙂
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You did. I tell the young writer. Be thankful someone give you time and help. I do appreciate. Thank you.
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Wow…beautiful poetry.
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Thank you. I need some romance and fun poetry. Can’t look at the negative stuff all day. Life is hard enough.
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I agree John!
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Extremely romantic!!
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John Donne gave me some positive motivation. Thank you for reading and the comment.
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